http://www.saabhistory.com/2009/02/03/saab-9-3-turbo-x-review-from-singapore/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=saab-9-3-turbo-x-review-from-singapore 1947 - 2011 Fri, 10 Feb 2012 14:10:05 +0000 hourly 1 http://www.saabhistory.com/2009/02/03/saab-9-3-turbo-x-review-from-singapore/#comment-1109 Brian Sat, 05 Jun 2010 01:09:54 +0000 http://www.saabhistory.com/2009/02/03/saab-9-3-turbo-x-review-from-singapore/#comment-1109 Your writing would be better if you avoided Newsspeak and stuck with plain English. "This particular report"? Why pad "this"? "Particular" adds nothing. Leave it. "Would be actually impressive in terms of its performance." How about "would make its performance impressive" or "make for impressive performance." The "actually" and "in terms of" are junk terms--its bad enough when newscasters babble this sort of pseudo-impressive lingo; in writing, it's inexcusable. Your writing would be better if you avoided Newsspeak and stuck with plain English. “This particular report”? Why pad “this”? “Particular” adds nothing. Leave it. “Would be actually impressive in terms of its performance.” How about “would make its performance impressive” or “make for impressive performance.” The “actually” and “in terms of” are junk terms–its bad enough when newscasters babble this sort of pseudo-impressive lingo; in writing, it’s inexcusable.

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